The sun illuminates the forest, causing the dragon's incandescent blue scales to glitter and reflect the sun light. The dragon yawns and stretches like a cat. She blinks repeatedly before stretching her wings. Then she jumps. She brings her wings down, hard again and again, until she flies out of the hollow she slept in and clears the treetops. She soars over the rippling leaves, lazily drifting from updraft to updraft, her sinewy length glinting like a treasure trove of jewels. The trees pass beneath like an emerald sea, waving and rippling as one.
As she draws near the castle, warning horns wind, echoing through the mountains and and forest. She roars in reply. She was coming closer and closer, her incandescent scales blinding the soldiers. Archers send volley after volley of arrows but none could pierce the dragons impenetrable sapphire scales. Suddenly white hot flames burst forth out of her mouth. Defenders are quickly consumed by fire. Many men turn and flee towards the keep, screaming as they run.
"Princess Michelle where are you? Its time to come out and play!"The beast bellows in a malicious tone.
Then at that moment the wind changes. Her sensitive nose catches a whiff of the princess. "I'll be back" the dragon threatens
"I'll be back." Then she turns and follows the scent of the princess.
"I am going to get you Princess Michelle. You can't run forever!" She calls to the princess.
"And I will kill you"
Hi Elise,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy the way you paint pictures with words. My favourite phrase from this post is
She roared in reply. She was coming closer and closer, her incandescent scales blinding the soldiers. Archers sent volley after volley of arrows but none could pierce the dragons impenetrable sapphire scales. Suddenly white hot flames burst forth out of her mouth. Defenders were quickly consumed by fire.
In your next post I would like to see your ideas separated more clearly by paragraphs so that it flows better.
For example... Then at that moment... could be a new paragraph. Also remember to have your speaking dialogue start on new lines for clarity :)
You are an amazing writer Elise! I am looking forward to the next episode!
PS - I will link your blog so that your other bloggers can give you feedback!